Mixar Lopez (Flakito75)
Mixar Lopez
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S P Oldham
As a person who has witnessed and experienced alcoholism in a close family member throughout all of my childhood and beyond, I clicked on this with interest. However, I have to be honest and say that, for me, it is written a totally impersonal style that does not fit with the tag at all. — quote 

"A raw look at alcoholism as a family disease

My personal Opinion"

To me, the tag indicated that you were going to share your own personal story or that of someone close to you, then give an opinion based on it. That is not what this is. For what I could read of this, this seems to be more a general opinion based on wider society and cultural history, which is not a personal account at all.

Nor is this 'raw,' which would indicate some blunt, brutally honest depiction of alcholism 'close up.' This is more an overview, and from some distance.

For what I could read of this, this seems to be more a general opinion based on wider society and cultural history, which is not a personal account at all.

Also, this piece would really benefit from some use of punctuation. At present it reads like a tirade. May I also suggest that you start it from an actual starting point, i.e the beginning of a sentence and not the middle of one? I appreciate that this is a longer piece 'broken up' into smaller chunks for posting (I think?) But even so, it is important to pay attention to sentence structure and punctuation.

I think this could be interesting but in my personal opinion, in its current form, it is simply not very readable. I am not trying to be derogatory or negative, I simply think that if you want reads and comments then aspects of these need attention.

With respect and kind regards,

S P Oldham.
Mixar Lopez Flakito75
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