Brothers in the south, Jeff & Jesse, are quite the handful, but will their actions have consequences?
This was set to be a four issue miniseries but, I'll be honest, I've only written this first issue. Maybe after getting an artist for it, I'll continue the story.
A Comic Book Script by Christopher Michael Carter
Panel 1: An old farmer hoeing in the field. A pickup truck is in the far distance. The old man, Ray Nixon, is in ratty overalls, a long sleeve plaid shirt underneath, and a denim cap.
Caption: Some days it seems like there's no relief from the hot, southern sun.
Panel 1: The pickup tearing up the road. Dust being kicked up behind them.
Panel 2: Two young men in the cab. Jesse (Blonde) and Jeff (Brunette). Jesse’s driving, Jeff looks excited and pointing forward.
Jeff: Look! It's old Ray Nixon. Let's give 'em a scare!
Panel 3: A tire squealing.
Panel 4: Ray's hands up in the air.
Panel 5: The truck tearing through Nixon's field.
Panel 1: The two brothers sitting down at the sheriff's station (facing us).
Sheriff (off page): What exactly goes through that head of yours? I say head because there's no way you have two brains between you two.
Panel 2: The boys' father with his jacket over his arm.
Pa: It's alright, Sheriff, I'll take it from here.
Panel 3: Outside the father's standing lecturing the guys.
Pa: You tore up Ray's field. You ruined his crops.
Jesse (off page): C'mon, Pa, we were just funning.
Panel 4: Same as 3 only now Pa's holding a couple of pitchforks.
Pa: So you guys wanna get into a bunch of crap? Here you go.
Panel 5: The guys next to a manure pile. It's steaming with stink lines.
Jeff: Aww maaan.
Panel 1: Ma's hands cutting vegetables.
Pa (off page): You know, Margaret...
Panel 2: Pa standing behind her but facing to the side.
Pa: Your dang boys are gonna be the death of me.
Ma: Why is it that they're always 'my' boys whenever they're out bein' little hellions?
Panel 3: The dad with a big toothy grin.
Panel 4: The two brothers, from behind, mid-back-up.
Jesse: You know this is your fault.
Jeff: You were the one driving...
Panel 5: Jesse’s eyes in close-up glaring over.
Panel 6: Jeff’s face getting manure splatted on it.
Panel 1: Jesse laughing.
Panel 2: Jesse’s face splattered next.
Jeff (off page): HA-HA!
Panel 3: Thin long panel of them throwing at each other. Jesse’s on the left and Jeff’s on the right.
Panel 4: Rest of the page-the two continuing their crap war.
Pa (off page): HEY BOYS! (all along the bottom of the page)
Panel 1: The dad on the deck far away.
Pa: I gave you pitchforks for a reason!
Panel 2: The boys looking at themselves covered in crap.
Panel 3: Their faces looking at each other.
Panel 4: The two busting up into laughter.
Panel 5: The dad talking to the mom. She's still in the kitchen. The dad's standing with beer.
Pa: All they wanna do is horseplay. If they're not joking they're fighting.
Ma: Sounds like a young man I used to know. A little youngin' with his two fists swingin' almost as much as his smart mouth.
Panel 6: Her face smirking.
Panel 1: The dad looking at his pocket watch.
Pa: Will ya look at that. I still got chores to do.
Ma: Mhmm. That's what I was thinking.
Pa: Always thinkin'!
Panel 2: The boys coming in smelling funky.
Jeff: Hey ma.
Jesse: Yeah, hey ma, wanna hug?
Ma: 'sniff' You boys are just nasty. Go wash up for supper.
Panel 3: The mom alone but surrounded by stink lines with a sour face.
Ma: 'sniff' Whew. Gonna have to bake some pie just to kill that smell.
Panel 4: Ray Nixon in bed. Still looking shocked.
Grandson #1 (off page): Grandpa? You alright?
Panel 5: From the grandpa's point of view we see the Nixon boys.
Grandson #1: Don't worry, Grandad, we'll take care of this.
Panel 1: Jeff wiping his mouth with his napkin.
Jeff: Mmm that was good stuff, ma.
Panel 2: A hand feeding the dog some asparagus.
Panel 3: Jesse chiming in.
Jesse: Yeah, ma. It was great.
Panel 4: The mom picking up plates.
Ma: Ya'll get ready for bed soon.
Panel 5: The dad pointing.
Pa: Let Callie out first!
Panel 6: Callie the dog by the door barking.
Panel 1: Most of the page-in their dark bedroom. One brother's in one bed and one's in the other.
Jeff: Hey, Jess?
Jesse: Yeah, Jeff?
Jeff: You don't think we went too far with ol' Ray Nixon today, do you?
Jesse: Nah, that old dog will be fine in the morning. We just took the wind out of his sails, is all.
Panel 2: Jeff in bed.
Jeff: I hope yer right. Cuz I got a bad feeling about it.
Panel 3: Jesse in bed.
Jesse: No, man. In the morning everything will be just fine. Trust me.
Panel 1: The boys asleep and it's sunny.
Pa (off page): BOYS!
Panel 2: The barn on fire as seen from the brothers' bedroom window.
Pa (off page): BOYS!
Panel 3: Jeff up looking jolted awake.
Panel 4: Jeff’s eyes looking shocked.
Panel 5: Close up. Reflection of the burning barn in his eye.
Jeff: Oh, crap, Jesse! Jesse get up!
Panel 6: One of them putting boots on.
Page 11 & 12
Panel 1: Splash page of the barn burning. The dad and farm hand are trying to get it out. The boys are showing up to help. The animals are freaking out.
Panel 1: Jesse with a bucket of water.
Panel 2: Jeff working the pump to get more water.
Panel 3: The farmhand and the dad talking outside the barn.
Farmhand: It's gonna burn out! Collapse from the inside!
Pa: I'll be just a minute!
Panel 4: Ma looking from the window in tears.
Panel 1: Ma coming outside with towels and blankets.
Ma: Here! Get these wet!
Panel 2: The boys throwing water on the fire.
Panel 3: Jesse and Ma wetting the cloths in the background while Jeff’s talking to the farmhand in the foreground.
Jeff: Where's Pa!?
Farmhand: He's still inside!
Panel 4: Jeff’s face stunned.
Panel 1: From inside-the barn doors open and the two boys standing there.
Panel 2: Smoke covering most of him but we see the dad's legs as he's lying on the ground.
Panel 3: The boys carrying Pa out.
Ma (off page): Oh, Lord!
Panel 4: Aerial view-Pa on the ground with Ma holding him. The boys standing by the side. The barn still smoking.
Panel 1: The two guys sitting together looking nervous.
Dr (off page): I don't know, Margaret. It's too early to tell. He's inhaled an awful lot of smoke.
Panel 2: The knob turning and door opening.
Panel 3: The boys looking over.
Panel 4: The Dr and mom talking.
Dr: Any clue what started the fire?
Ma: No. We still don't know.
Panel 5: The doors open and the boys are on their feet.
Jeff: Can we see him now?
Panel 6: Back to Ma and the Dr.
Dr: Margaret, always a pleasure.
Ma: Yeah, thanks again, Dr.
Panel 1: Pa lying in bed.
Boys (off page): Pa? Can you hear us?
Panel 2: From Pa's bedside view, we see the boys.
Jesse: Hang in there, Pa.
Jeff: Yeah, every things gonna be alright.
Panel 3: Just heads. Ma between them.
Ma: I need you boys to run into town for me.
Jesse: Stay strong, Pa.
Panel 4: Out of the room, Ma, shutting the bedroom door.
Panel 5: Ma tying her robe tighter.
Ma: I want you boys to find out what you can about that fire.
Boys (off page): Yes, Ma'am.
Ma: But be careful.
Panel 1: The boys in the truck. This time Jeff’s driving.
Jesse: Think he's gonna die?
Jeff: Shut up, Jesse, don't even ask that.
Panel 2: Different angle. From the driver's side.
Jeff: What do you think caused the fire?
Jesse: You mean Who?
Panel 3: A paper saying “Pick Up List" in one of their hands.
Panel 4: The two of them in a store. One is pushing the cart.
Jeff: It's a barn, Jesse. A number of things coulda started that fire.
Jesse: I think someone started it. On purpose.
Panel 5: The two leaving with a big brown paper bag.
Jeff: We'll get back and check the barn.
Nixon (off page): Well, if it ain't the twins!
Panel 6: From behind the boys we see the Nixon boys (about 3 of them) in a truck.
Jesse: Eh, hey Nixon.
Panel 1: One of the Nixon boys with his arm resting out of the window.
Nixon 1: Heard about what happened. Too bad.
Panel 2: Jesse’s face looking to the side a bit confused.
Panel 3: The back of the truck contains empty gas cans.
Panel 4: A fist balling up.
Panel 5: Same Nixon smiling and holding his hand up.
Nixon 1: Y'know your daddy really should stop smoking HAHA!
Panel 6: A fist crashing into the guy's face.
Panel 1: The 3 guys get out of the truck and the twins are ready for them.
Panel 2: Front view of the boys with their fists up.
Page 21 & 22
Panel 1: The two of them punching one guy out simultaneously.
Panel 2: Jesse about to throw a punch.
Caption: A fight with the Nixon boys is a long time coming.
Panel 3: Jeff grabbing a guy by his shirt.
Panel 4: Jesse punching a guy in the stomach.
Nixon 1: HUH!
Panel 5: Jeff following through with a right cross.
Panel 6: The third guy coming to.
Panel 7: Jeff kneeling down and knocking him back out.
Panel 8: Jesse kicking a bent over guy in the ribs.
Panel 1: 3 guys lying around.
Nixon 1: Aw, man.
Nixon 2: Ugh it hurts.
Nixon 3: Zzz.
Panel 2: The two boys with their fists up still pumped.
Panel 3: Just heads. Jesse’s looking over at Jeff.
Jesse: We should probably get out of here.
Panel 4: A hand picking up the bag.
Panel 1: Pa in bed resting while Ma is putting a wet cloth on his head.
Ma: Shh, it's okay.
Panel 2: The damaged barn.
Panel 3: Jesse standing with his arms crossed.
Jesse: They really need us right now.
Panel 4: The sun setting.
Jesse (off page): We need to clean it up and stay out of trouble.
Panel 5: Both in frame-Jesse standing (seen from behind) and Jeff laying down on the hood/windshield of the truck.
Jeff: ...We got a lot of work to do.